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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 wor

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The given diagrams illustrate the floor plan of a
library
 in 2001, and its refurbishment in the year 2009.
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,
library
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 is on a rectangular piece of land, with the entrance on the south end side, and a sitting area roughly in the middle. The ground floor of the
library
 was radically changed in 2009, with the addition of certain new book categories and digital materials. The western wall of the
library
 had
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 and history books only in 2001. By 2009, books related to KItchen, Law and Economics were
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 added
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 that side. The northern end, which was previously occupied by "Fiction" was replaced by Tables, and a space for children was
also
 added beside it. The newspaper & periodicals section
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 removed and its place "DVDs and Films" section was added. Just next to it, computers were
also
 placed, so people
can
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 use them. The central sitting area, where there used
be
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 8 small tables, now
have
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 4 large tables.
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Make sure your introduction provides a clear overview of both diagrams. Mention any major changes without going into too much detail, as these can be expanded upon in the following paragraphs.
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To improve coherence, ensure that paragraphs are well-structured and each paragraph contains a clear main idea. This will help the reader follow the flow of information more easily.
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You have effectively summarized the main features of the diagrams and provided relevant comparisons between 2001 and 2009.
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The use of specific terms like 'western wall' and 'northern end' helps in providing clear directions and improves clarity.

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