Some scientists think that there are intelligent lifeforms on the other planets and messages should be sent to conduct them . Other scientists think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous . Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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At present no one on our planet is sure about
the
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life
in outer
space
.
However
, there are
scientists
who believe that there is
life
in
space
and their civilisation is more advanced than
human
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humans
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. So we should send
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a signal
the signal
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signal
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to them in
order
to communicate with them but
scientists
believed
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that it’s a bad idea. I will elaborate on
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further
paragraphs.
To begin
with, There are many
scientists
in today’s world who devoted their
life
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in
order
to search for evidence for
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alien
in
universe
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the universe
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.
Moreover
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many
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had
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happened
time
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to time in human history that give
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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of the existence of
alien
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and
there
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their
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advance
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technology
due to
these evidences
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this evidence
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scientists
tend to communicate with different
world
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worlds
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using signals in
order
to make good
relation
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relations
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with them and land from their technology.
On the other hand
, some
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science professors, mention it as a bad idea or mistake which can lead
the
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humanity in
a
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serious danger,
although
we have no idea about the intentions of Species that
existed
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outside
a
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the
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universe and by sending signals, we are just inviting them to our home.
Further more
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,some
scientists
argue
you
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that it is just
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a wastage
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wastage
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of money to spend on these
type
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of things as there are many other
topic
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which need to be examined and are more important for the growth of our species .
For instance
in 2020 in
Navada
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Nevada
in America, the
space
program was set up in
order
to search for
life
on
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, which had
budget
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of $2 billion
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failed. In conclusion,
According to
me
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me,
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curiosity regarding
existence
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the existence
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of living
thing
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things
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in outer
space
is right but we should try not to interrupt their
life
as that can be pretty dangerous for us and if not dangerous it might not be as helpful as we
thought
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.
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Task Response
Your essay provides a basic discussion of both views. Make sure to elaborate on each view with more depth and provide specific details or examples to substantiate your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to enhance the clarity of your arguments by organizing your paragraphs more effectively. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, which is clearly stated at the beginning of the paragraph.
Conclusion
While your conclusion summarizes your opinion on the matter, consider reinforcing it by restating the main points discussed in your essay, providing a more comprehensive closure.
Introduction
Your introduction clearly outlines the debate around sending messages to potential extraterrestrial life, offering a broad view of the issue.
Conclusion
The essay includes a conclusion that states your opinion, adding some degree of closure to the discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
You've provided a structure within which both sides of the argument are presented, which shows an understanding of coherence.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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