You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. My name is Dilnura, and I am writing to request that you formally join your sports club.
I have carefully considered the need for training in your sports club, and after thorough consideration, I believe that exercises and sports can benefit me both physically and mentally. I understand that this
may not be easy because you do not only have this
issue, but so many, and I am open to discussing ways to address these issues collaboratively.
I am confident that by doing so we both can benefit from its results, and I believe that it will not be much of a problem, and it would have a positive impact on our progress.
Thank you for taking the time to review my request. I am more than willing to provide any additional information or clarification if needed. I look forward to the possibility of fulfilling my request and appreciate your attention to this
matter.
Yours faithfully,
Dilnura.Submitted by Teo Halimov on
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task achievement
Make the purpose of your request clearer and more specific. Explain exactly what you're asking for (e.g., membership options, availability of facilities) to improve task response.
coherence cohesion
Include more connecting words or phrases to guide the reader through your request smoothly, enhancing coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You have a polite and respectful tone throughout your letter, which is suitable for this type of communication.
coherence cohesion
You have used appropriate paragraphs to structure your letter, which enhances readability.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite