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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
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The table provides key information about the preferences
of
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 travel modes in England throughout the period
of
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between
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 1985 and 2000. The units are measured by the number of
miles
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 that travelled per person per year.
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 , it is clear from the graph that cars represent the highest number of
miles
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 in the two mentioned years.
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, bicycle and taxi modes indicated the lowest numbers in the table.
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 the data shown, Local buses were utilized by travellers in 1985, the average
distnace
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distance
 of
miles
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 was 429;
while
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 in the year
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2000, it only represented 274.
In contrast
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, the popularity of
long distance
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long-distance
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 buses increased from 54
miles
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 in 1985 to 124
miles
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 by 2000.
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, travelling by walking was slightly declined from 255 to 237
miles
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. In terms of taxi
mode
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mode,
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 it showed a significant
increased
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increase
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 from 13 to 42
mile
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miles
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; same as the trains which rose from 289 to 366.
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, all travel modes in total indicated a soar from 4740 to 6475 by 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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