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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates about
metro
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the metro
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station
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stations
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 of metropolitan
cities
 with their features in three categories which are date opened,
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
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the route
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 and
number
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a number
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 of
passengers
 frame
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year. On the one hand,
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 tube was opened in London in 1863. London tube
route
 is the longest public transportation carrying 775 million
passengers
 per year.
Railway
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The railway
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system
 of Tokyo takes third place in
chart
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the chart
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 it was set up in 1927.
Peopel’s
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People’s
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 Tokyo station is popular. After
London
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the London
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metro
system
 was opened in Paris with 199 kilometres of
route
. Paris
metro
system
 takes second place with carrying
passengers
 after Tokyo.
On the other hand
,
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Kyoto
metro
system
 was constructed in 1981 after Washington DC .
Railway
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The railway
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system
 of Kyoto stays back kilometres of
route
with
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carrying
passengers
 per year
with compare
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compared
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in
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to
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 six various
cities
.
In addition
, The latest
railway
system
 was built in Los Angeles.
Also
 its ranking
as
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a
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the
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 same
with
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 Kyoto. In conclusion, there are 6 different big
cities
 in
chart
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the chart
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 and it categorizes
railway
station
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stations
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 of
cities
 with three aspects.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, cities, route, passengers, railway, system with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railways
  • kilometers of route
  • passenger numbers
  • annually
  • compare and contrast
  • mega-cities
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • extensive network
  • rapid transit
  • capacity
  • commuter volume
  • inauguration date
  • modernization
  • vintage
  • urban development
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