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The table shows the percentage of spending by five different countries on three product groups.

The table shows the percentage of spending by five different countries on three product groups.
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The table provides information about the percentage of spending by five countries
depend
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depending
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 on three areas.
Overall
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, it is clear to say the highest number of money spent
common
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is common
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 in
the
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apply
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all five countries, which is food, drink and
tobbaco
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tobacco
. Unfortunately, the lowest amount of money that
spent
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is spent
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, leads to
the
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apply
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leisure and education in all five. By that time, clothing and
footwear's
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footwear
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 numbers stayed
same
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the same
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 by
average
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an average
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7
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of 7
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%. In the first group, Turkey
leaded
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led
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 first place with 32.14%, and
this
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 percentage is almost doubled
Italy
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in Italy
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, Sweden and Spain which is a big gap. Meanwhile,
people
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the people
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 of Ireland spent their earnings with approximately 28.91%, which is
second
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the second
a second
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 highest amount after Turkey.
Lastly
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, in the clothing and footwear category, most spendens are
Italian's
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Italians
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 with 9%.
On the other hand
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,
other
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the other
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 four countries
are
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apply
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almost had
same
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the same
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 amounts
averagly
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averagely
average
averaged
 6%.
However
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, Turks are
best
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the best
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 investors in education with only 4.35%, which is the worst when
it
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apply
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compared to the other groups, and
people
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the people
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 of Spain had the lowest number for leisure
spendings
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spending
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.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 Ireland, Italy and Sweden remained stable between 2-3.2%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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