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The maps below show the recent changes in the town of Kimsville

The maps below show the recent changes in the town of Kimsville
#maps #show #changes #town #kimsville
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The two maps illustrate the main changes which have taken
places
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 in the town of Kimsville between the year 2002 and today.
Overall
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, it appears that Kimsville has become a much more industrial
city
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, with far more logistics and commercial facilities.
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However
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 some parts of
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city
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the city
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 remain unchanged. One interesting change is that new apartments have been built in
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the north-west
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north-west
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northwest
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 side of
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city
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the city
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 providing residents with new homes .In 2002, there was not any accommodation for transport, but a train station
has been
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 constructed near
to
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the town
center
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. Another interesting change is that the
south-west
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 of the
city
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 used to be a green area, with lots of trees, but the trees have been cut down and a new football stadium has been introduced. If we look at the east part of
map
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, we can notice only one variation. The factory has been demolished and replaced by a new software company.On the right side of the stadium, there was a theatre of old cinemas, having been transformed into a pub with no visible difference.
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 centre and trees
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south
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the south
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 side remain unchanged
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential development
  • transformation
  • industrial areas
  • housing estates
  • service-oriented economy
  • modern apartment complexes
  • amenities
  • transportation infrastructure
  • congestion
  • bicycle lanes
  • eco-friendly
  • accessibility
  • public spaces
  • recreational facilities
  • quality of life
  • vibrant community
  • leisure
  • exercise
  • social interaction
  • well-being
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