The diagram below shows how water is prossed to make it drinkable. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how water is prossed to make it drinkable. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart depicts the process that consists of 5 main stages including abstraction, clarification, filter, disinfection and distribution, through which
water
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goes to become safe enough to drink.
Firstly
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,
water
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is being abstracted out of the river through the intake pumping station to the reservoir, where it is stored until it is time for the next steps. Afterwards,
water
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is passed to the clarification tanks with a flash mixer that helps to get all the sludge inside a special holding tray. At
this
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point,
process
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the process
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divides
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is divided
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into two parts. Liquid with sand particles goes through the centrifuge and filter, where all the bits that aren't needed stay. Later on, they will be transferred by the conveyor and disposed of. At the same time filtered
water
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goes back to the clarification tanks and the cycle starts over. After the
water
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is cleaned from the larger particles, the next stage called disinfection takes place. River
water
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flows through the rapid gravity filter filled with chlorine.
This
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step is done to kill the remaining germs in the
water
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.
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, after passing the chlorine contact tank,
water
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is stored in the reservoir.
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, drinkable H2O is transferred to the buildings and can be safely used for domestic purposes.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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