Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?
Nowadays numerous
people
do not know about their neighbors
. Of course
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course,
this
is bad
situation. It can Add an article
a bad
be
lead Unnecessary verb
apply
some
misunderstandings among Change preposition
to some
their
.
In my Correct pronoun usage
them
opinion
the main reason is building multi-storey houses. So many Add a comma
opinion,
people
lives
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live
this
kind of Change preposition
in this
buildings
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building
our
modern world. Apartment building inhabitants have lots of work and Change preposition
in our
their
personal Correct pronoun usage
apply
works
. And they might be busy during the day. In most Fix the agreement mistake
work
cases
they Add a comma
cases,
goes
their Change the verb form
go
works
early Wrong verb form
work
mornings
and come back later. Fix the agreement mistake
morning
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is a
main reason Correct article usage
the
of
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for
problem
. Add an article
the problem
a problem
Unfortunately
I have had Add a comma
Unfortunately,
same
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the same
as
experience in my life. Change preposition
apply
Then
I was a student. And I used to study during the day. On
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As
the
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a
result
I did not know about my Add a comma
result,
neighbors
. I strongly believe that being over swamped and living Change the spelling
neighbours
multi-storey
houses main causes of Change preposition
in multi-storey
this
problem
. Especially, our
developed world we run into Change preposition
in our
this
issues in most cases.
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these
In
Change preposition
This
this
issue has several solves
. I believe that apartment building inhabitants must conversation with their Replace the word
solutions
neighbors
when they find spare time. Especially, Change the spelling
neighbours
in
the weekends is Change preposition
at
great
opportunity for conversations. Among village Add an article
a great
people
we do not run into Add a comma
people,
this
problem
because this
humans help Change the determiner
these
to
each other and they communicate a lot with their Change preposition
apply
neighbors
. I trust communication and help to
each other Change preposition
apply
the
main Change preposition
as the
solves
. Our developed world Replace the word
solutions
know
very well about Correct subject-verb agreement
knows
neighbors
so important.
In conclusion
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conclusion,
do
not Unnecessary verb
apply
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having neighbors
neighbors
might Change the spelling
neighbours
be
cause some misunderstandings and conflicts among Unnecessary verb
apply
people
. When we must
try to resolve Verb problem
apply
this
problem
it can be
lead Unnecessary verb
apply
positive
effects.Change preposition
to positive
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