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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day
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The two maps illustrate the area of
college
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 in 2006 and the present
day
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.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 in 2006 Lynwich
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college
Capitalize word
College
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 had
less
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fewer
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 facilities than
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college
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the college
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 now. As the map shows, the
college
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 was
more
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apply
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greener than in
present
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the present
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day
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,
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apply
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 but had
less
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fewer
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 facilities and buildings than in 2006 . In 2006 there were trees in the southeast corner, but
trees
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the trees
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 were cleared and converted into a library in
present
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the present
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day
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.
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College
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The college
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 building did not
changed
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change
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 since 2006, but now
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 field in the southwest corner is less
,
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apply
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 than it was in 2006.In 2006 there were
bo
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two
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sport
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sports
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 centers, but now sports
centre
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centres
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build
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built
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instead
Linking Words
 of
library
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the library
a library
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. In the
center
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centre
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 of
area
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the area
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 in 2006 there was
not
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no
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cafeteria
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a cafeteria
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, but now
cafeteria
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a cafeteria
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build
Wrong verb form
built
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. In the
centre
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centre,
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 there was
walking
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a walking
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 road in 2006, but now it become
more
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apply
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bigger than in 2006.
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College
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The college
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 building did not
changed
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change
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 in the east of
map
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the map
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. There was
not
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no
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 bus stop in 2006, but it appears in
present
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the present
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day
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.
Car
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The car
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 park in the northwest corner was bigger than in
present
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the present
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day
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.
Car
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The car
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 park was divided
to
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into
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 bike storage
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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