Some people think that cinemas will one day close due to the popularity of online streaming services for films and series. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, most
of
people watch Change preposition
apply
movies
online Use synonyms
instead
of going to watch Linking Words
it
at the Correct pronoun usage
them
cinemas
. I agree Use synonyms
Correct word choice
that cineamas
cineamas
will close Change the capitalization
Cineamas
one
day because high prices for Change preposition
for one
ticket
.
Fix the agreement mistake
tickets
To begin
, watching Linking Words
movies
and series at home Use synonyms
most
popular Add a missing verb
is most
due to
Linking Words
save
time. Change the verb form
saving
For example
, people work late at night so they get Linking Words
to
tired to go out to watch Replace the word
too
movies
and love to stay home after a long day. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the time Linking Words
show
at Wrong verb form
shown
cinemas
is Use synonyms
sechedule
so it is hard to find Correct your spelling
schedule
scheduled
a good films
Correct the article-noun agreement
a good film
good films
Change preposition
at in
in
Correct your spelling
an
aproprate
time.
Correct your spelling
appropriate
As well as
Linking Words
,
one of the most famous family Remove the comma
apply
activity
is watching Fix the agreement mistake
activities
movie
Fix the agreement mistake
movies
togather
so it is Correct your spelling
together
expancive
for Correct your spelling
expansive
expensive
family
to Add an article
the family
a family
going
to Wrong verb form
go
cinmas
. Correct your spelling
cinemas
cinema
Pepole
who Correct your spelling
People
is lives
in Wrong verb form
live
Correct article usage
the sidecountry
sidecountry
is hard to reach Correct your spelling
side-country
side country
cinemas
Use synonyms
due to
Linking Words
long
distance. Correct article usage
the long
For instance
, my sister Linking Words
live
in Change the verb form
lives
village
and the Add an article
the village
a village
Correct your spelling
nearest
nearst
Correct your spelling
nearest
cinemas
it is about 130km Use synonyms
so
they subscribe Rephrase
away so
Change preposition
to
in
apps Change preposition
to
than
going to Rephrase
rather than
Correct your spelling
cinemas
cenimas
. Correct your spelling
cinemas
However
, with the development of Linking Words
technology
there are more online streaming Add a comma
technology,
website
to Fix the agreement mistake
websites
whatch
Correct your spelling
watch
movie
for free.
Fix the agreement mistake
movies
to conclude
, watching Linking Words
movies
is popular for all Use synonyms
the
age groups but with the development of technology Correct article usage
apply
watch
Wrong verb form
watching
Add an article
a movie
the movie
movie
at home is easy now with all the family Fix the agreement mistake
movies
membares
.Correct your spelling
members
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coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by connecting ideas more clearly. Use linking words and transitional phrases to improve the overall coherence and guide the reader between points.
task achievement
Develop the main ideas with more detailed examples to fully support your argument on why cinemas might close.
task achievement
Work on eliminating spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity. While minor inaccuracies don't lower the score significantly, fixing them will strengthen the overall response.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states the writer's position on the topic, making it easy for the reader to understand the main argument.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the essay, reinforcing the writer's position.
task achievement
The essay responds to the task by considering multiple aspects of the issue, such as time convenience and family activities, thus providing a complete response to the prompt.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.