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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of many species & loss of biodioversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solution can be done to to solve it?

#influence #beings #world #ecosystem #extinction #species #loss #biodioversity #biodiversity
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Ecosystem
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Ecosystems
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 have had
distrubtion
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distribution
 by humans lately ,
in addition
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species
 have extinct and loss of
biodioversity
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biodiversity
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 do believe that human influence
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lead
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 to cause of loss of biodiversity. Many
species
 have extinct in
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 decades or so
for example
dionsours
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dinosaurs
, the great white sharks and some
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 of monkeys . Researchers do believe that
human
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humans
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 have influenced extinction , excessive climate
change
 and
change
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changes
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 in food chains have changed the diversity of having different
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 and
species
 .Some do believe that since the evolution and technology have started
alot
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a lot
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stability of
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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however
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 that
didnot
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did not
didn't
 stop humans from the prime
change
 and influence. Lossing
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biodiversity
have
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 been a huge challenge especially
it
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 is an outcome of bad handling of
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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for
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animal
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animals
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 and diversity in general have made the animal types so limited , food chain is
effected
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affected
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 despite that
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 is trying to resolve it by nature . Mother
earth
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have
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 been supportive
for
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 animals it
have
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 provided new resources for food , water and a place to stay
such
 as undergrounds , caves and more . in my
opinion
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 humans have
done
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 an enormous
change
 to the
ecosystem
 in an awful way leading
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to
loss
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the loss
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biodiversity
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of biodiversity
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 and different
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types
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 of
species
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coherence cohesion
Include a more structured introduction and conclusion to frame the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that sentences within paragraphs logically connect to each other for a smoother progression of ideas.
task achievement
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Clarify the main ideas and support them with relevant details for a comprehensive response.
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The essay acknowledges crucial causes of biodiversity loss, such as human influence and climate change.
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Mentions the importance of ecosystems and diversity, offering insights into potential solutions.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Biodiversity:** The variety of plant and animal life in the world or in a particular habitat, often seen as an indicator of the health of an ecosystem.
  • 2. **Deforestation:** The action of clearing a wide area of trees, negatively impacting natural habitats.
  • 3. **Ecosystem:** A biological community of interacting organisms and their physical environment.
  • 4. **Pollution:** The presence in or introduction into the environment of a substance which has harmful or poisonous effects.
  • 5. **Climate Change:** A change in global or regional climate patterns, often referring to the rise in global temperatures from the mid-20th century onwards.
  • 6. **Overexploitation:** The excessive use of species that have economic value.
  • 7. **Invasive Species:** Non-native species that spread from the point of introduction to become naturalized and negatively impact native species and ecosystems.
  • 8. **Habitat Destruction:** The process in which natural habitat is rendered unable to support the species present.
  • 9. **Extinction:** The state or process of a species, family, or larger group being or becoming extinct.
  • 10. **Conservation:** The action of conserving something, in this case, biodiversity and ecosystems.
  • 11. **Sustainable Practices:** Methods of using resources in ways that do not deplete them or cause harm to the environment.
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