Some people think that researching the past is a waste of time and money. We should instead focus on the issues if today's world. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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that researching the past is a waste of time and money. we must
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interesting topic. In
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today's world.
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human civilization. If we focus
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the past is a waste
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Logical Structure
Your essay would benefit from a more organized structure. Try outlining your main points before writing to ensure a logical flow of ideas throughout the essay. This will help improve your logical structure score.
Complete Response
Make sure your essay addresses all aspects of the question. Introduce a balanced discussion by considering arguments for and against the statement, before stating your personal opinion clearly and thoroughly.
Relevant Specific Examples
Develop each point more thoroughly with relevant and specific examples that relate directly to the question. For instance, you could provide examples of how focusing on present issues has brought beneficial outcomes.
Introduction & Conclusion Present
Your introduction clearly states your opinion, which is a strong start to your essay.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
You have a clear grasp of the topic and have begun to present reasons to support your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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