The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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of Iranian, Greek and Turkish
students
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who enrolled at Sheffield University in the
year
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2005 to 2009. The
number
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of Greek
students
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who enrolled at Sheffield University experienced a significant decrease between the
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year
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years
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2005 and 2009. There were approximately 180
greek
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students
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who
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enrolled in the
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2005, but the
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of enrolment kept decreasing in the
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2006 until the
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2007 but remained stable between the
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2007 and 2008 at around 70 enrolments.
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in the
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2009, it decreased again to only around 45 enrolments.
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, the two other countries experienced
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stable growth between the
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year
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2005 and 2009. The
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of Iranian
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went up from approximately 40 in 2005 to 160 in 2009. Turkey
also
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experienced a stable growth from less than 25
students
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in 2005 to around 120
students
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in 2009. In conclusion, the
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of
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from
greece
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who enrolled experienced a significant decrease between the
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year
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2005 and 2009,
while
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the
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of Iranian and Turkish
students
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experienced an increase
between
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the same
year
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enrolled
  • Enrollments
  • Trend
  • Steady increase
  • Initial increase
  • Decline
  • Sharp increase
  • Peaking
  • Noteworthy comparison
  • Contrasting trends
  • Period
  • Given period
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