Nowadays, distance-learning programs are such common thing for us (the study material by post, by internet) but some people argue that courses can never be taken as good as those by attending in a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The

education

system today is increasingly dominated by distance-learning programs where students can approach

courses

and materials online.

As a result

, some people oppose

this

concept, arguing that attending

class

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classes

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face-to-face in college or university is the better way to learn. I strongly disagree with

this

the

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apply

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view that online

courses

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are

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not beneficial. First and foremost, the vast majority of universities or colleges

not

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evenly distributed across regions and are often located only in metropolitan or capital cities. Meanwhile, almost 70% of high school graduates come from rural areas and have limited funds to migrate to urban centres. A student in rural Indonesia,

for instance

, may have to travel

hundreds

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kilometers to attend a university, causing significant costs for transportation and housing.

Therefore

, distance-learning programs enable

such

students to pursue their

education

from home, eliminating the need for living

while

still providing access to quality

courses

and resources.

Furthermore

, the conservative method of studying has limited hours, typically held from morning until five o’clock.

This

system may prevent certain individuals from attending classes,

such

as workers pursuing

further

education

or people with nocturnal tendencies who are more productive at night.

This

means that online

courses

could be more effective and suitable for

such

individuals. In conclusion, attending directly to college or university in person is not the best way to gain knowledge. The limited availability of advanced

education

facilities,

which

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impacts students’ ambitions and does not support specific

society

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conditions for continuing their

education

. Distance learning provides an alternative for people from all walks of life to achieve their dreams, offering results comparable to traditional systems.

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task achievement

You have tackled the task effectively, discussing both the challenges and the benefits of distance-learning programs.

coherence cohesion

The structure of your essay is clear, with a strong introduction and a solid conclusion that ties together your main points.

task achievement

Your points are well-developed and relevant to the question asked.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

267 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Distance-learning
E-learning
Online education
Asynchronous/Synchronous learning
Webinar
Virtual classroom
MOOC (Massive Open Online Course)
Accessibility
Flexibility
Cost-effectiveness
Self-paced
Interactivity
Hands-on experience
Networking
Academic integrity
Assessment methods
Practical skills
Accreditation
Recognition
Self-discipline

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