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The graph below shows the price of bananas in four different countries from 1994 to 2004.

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A glance at the graph provided reveals the value of
bananas
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 across Japan, France, Germany and the USA during one decade from 1994 to 2004.
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, one particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that by far the highest price of
bananas
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 belonged to Japan in 1995. In stark contrast, the lowest cost of
bananas
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 was to the USA in 1994. It is
also
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 interesting to note that the rate of
bananas
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 in Japan fluctuated widely over a period of 10 years from 1994 to 2004.
In addition
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, the trend of banana prices in France did not change from 1994 to 1998, but
after
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this
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 period fluctuated slightly until 2004.
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, the rate of
bananas
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 in Germany fluctuated gradually in all years, from 1994 to 2004.
Additionally
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, the ratio of
bananas
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 in the USA increased sharply from 1994 to 1995, but that of
bananas
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 did not change from 1995 to 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • comparative price trends
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • significant price fluctuations
  • dramatic rise/fall
  • comparisons
  • highest/lowest prices
  • potential reasons
  • economic conditions
  • import/export taxes
  • agricultural policies
  • external factors
  • natural disasters
  • trade agreements
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