The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides information about percentages of drinking habits by people in
United
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the United
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States based on
age
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perspective.
Overall
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,
according to
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the graph, most of the US human habits are never drinking.
Morover
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, the never-drinker population is above 50% to 60% any
ages
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age
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, except in the
age
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of 64-74 society.
On the other hand
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, the most significant feature increase in ex-drinkers. It is about 5% nearly to 10% for young adults.
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, in senior citizens with the
age
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groups
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, it experienced upward to about 20% population. There is
also
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the constancy of the light drinkers for the
age
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groups
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16-24 and 25-34 that has around 25%-35% and decreased for the other
age
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groups
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. There is
also
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a slight
improve
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for the heavy drinkers for the
age
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groups
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of 35-44 and 45-54 with over a 10% than the other
age
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groups
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. In conclusion, there are fluctuating total
of
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apply
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drinking habits of the US population by
age
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Drinking habits
  • Population demographics
  • Age group/bracket
  • Alcohol consumption
  • Frequency of drinking
  • Heavy drinking
  • Moderate drinking
  • Teetotaler
  • Legal drinking age
  • Societal norms
  • Trends over time
  • Underage drinking
  • Alcohol abuse
  • Health implications
  • Statistical data
  • Comparative analysis
  • Bar chart/Line graph
  • Binge drinking
  • Responsibility in drinking
  • Age-specific patterns
  • Cross-generational comparison
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