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The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The diagram shows how tomato
ketchup
 is made, starting from picking
tomatoes
 and ending with selling the product.
First,
tomatoes
 are picked and put in baskets.
Then
, they are sorted to remove bad ones, and the good ones are sent to the factory. At the factory, the stalks, skins, and seeds are removed from the
tomatoes
.
Next,
the
tomatoes
 are crushed, and ingredients like sugar, vinegar, and salt are added.
This
 mixture is boiled and left for two hours. After that, the
ketchup
 goes through a quality check. The
ketchup
 is
then
 poured into bottles,
labeled
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, and packed.
Finally
, the bottles are sent to supermarkets, where customers can buy them. Tomato
ketchup
 is commonly eaten with foods like hamburgers and fries.
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Consider adding more specific details to enhance the clarity of the process being described.
task achievement
Ensure all steps are fully elaborated to optimize the task response component.
coherence cohesion
Use a concluding sentence or paragraph to further summarize the information and end the report effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear chronological order of the tomato ketchup production process.
task achievement
All major steps from picking tomatoes to selling the product are covered succinctly.

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