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The map below shows the development of an area between 1995 and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of an area between 1995 and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The plan given above reveals information about the transformation of an
area
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 from the year 1995 and the present.
To begin
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, the application of a farmland and adjacent forest park which were located in the top-right corner of the
area
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 was altered to a golf field and tennis court.
Secondly
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, on the east side of the
area
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, a car park was added to the hotel.
Moreover
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, in the south, currently, there is no fishing port, which was once located
in
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on
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 the sea beach, and the fish market near the sea was substituted by apartments.
Furthermore
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, on the right side of the road extending from east to west, the restaurants give service to customers, which previously were used as shopping centres.
Finally
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, in the
west of
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western
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the
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apply
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area
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, the road, connecting the
residents
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resident's
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area
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 to the main road, was developed to the west.
Overall
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, the
area
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 was witness to the significant alterations.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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