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University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #students
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Some individuals argue that
education
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 centres should be without any charges for all
students
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 .I completely agree with
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 point of view for a variety of justifiable reasons. First and foremost
students
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 from lower financial
background
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backgrounds
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 will have access to
education
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 . Today there are families whose children are very literate, but because they have a low level of financial security they cannot afford to
study
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 at fee-paying universities .
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 , for every country student with a high level of
education
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 is very essential and
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it would reduce unemployment .
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, in Korea, since 1995, the government has been funding some of its budget so that families with low financial means can
study
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 for free. Another compelling argument is that pupils will not concerned about
financial
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 part of their
education
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 and will be focused on their studies . Most
students
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 who
study
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 abroad work part-time to pay university tuition
fee
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.
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result
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 they cannot concentrate on their lessons because they cannot devote much time to studying.
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 ,
according to
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 statistics from the Musavat newspaper,
students
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 who
study
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 and work at the same time have low scores. In conclusion ,I entirely support the view that
education
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 must be free because it
help
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 to get higher
education
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 for everyone and
and
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helps
students
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 focus more on their lessons than on their work.
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language
Try to vary your sentence structures to make the essay more engaging.
task achievement
Consider providing additional examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easy to follow your argument.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, such as the one about Korea, to support your arguments.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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