Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals believe that the major environmental issue of our time is the loss of significant
species
of plants and animals,
while
others admit that other problems are more vital. In
this
essay, I will examine both
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and present my opinion. On one side of
argument
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, the extinction of specific flora and fauna
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as
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a threat to
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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and biodiversity. When a
species
vanishes, the equilibrium is disrupted, and the
overall
well-being of nature is
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affected.
For instance
, the disappearance
species
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like bees could result in diminished plant reproduction
due to
this
fact it may impact the food supply for various
species
.
Additionally
, endangered
species
may have unique characteristics that could aid in scientific and medical discoveries. Losing them would not only harm nature but
also
deprive humanity of potential benefits. On the other
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, some argue that there are more challenging problems to be solved
such
as air pollution, overpopulation and global warming which all of
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have a direct impact on the environment and human life. As we can observe, now in metropolitan cities we are facing with increasing amount of population which can cause air and noise population.
Also
, the earth is becoming warmer, and it may eventually lead to the melting of the polar ice and become
uninhabitable
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era for
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the creature
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creature
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. In conclusion,
while
the loss of
species
is undoubtedly a significant concern
due to
its impact on biodiversity and potential scientific discoveries, I believe that advanced environmental problems
such
as climate change and pollution pose an even greater threat to the planet. Addressing these challenges is essential for the survival of both humanity and the natural world.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay presents a clear discussion of both views. Just ensure that your ideas flow smoothly from one to another with clear transitions between paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Focus on providing more detailed and specific examples to strongly support your arguments.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-articulated and clearly express the essay's main idea and opinion.
Task Achievement
Both sides of the argument are addressed, showcasing your ability to explore multiple perspectives on the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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