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The two pie charts show the average spending by households in a country at two different points in its economic development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts show the average spending by households in a country at two different points in its economic development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the variation of typical household expenditure segments in 1920 and 2000.
Overall
,it can be seen that
,
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even though the ratio had decreased in the later budget for both meals and recreation and other items were the largest proportions in both points.
To begin
 with,in 1920 approximately a
three-quater
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three-quarter
three-quarters
 of income had been spent
for
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the
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food and
bererages
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beverages
in
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1920,
while
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reconstruction
 and other items stood at just below
than
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one-tenth.
However
,later in 2000 the latter slightly increased to 34.2% by more than two-fold,
whereas
 the former dramatically dropped by roughly
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50%.
Furthermore
,
cost
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for
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 shifting and mass
communcation
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communication
 experienced a
steadily increased
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by
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 nearly 10%. In comparison,figures for education and housing reached
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around 6% over the period of time,
while
 fuel
as well as
houselhold grocerries
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household groceries
 leveled off with just 6%.
On the other hand
,spending on
healtcare
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healthcare
 and
textile
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 have slightly
exapanded
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expanded
 as twice much as after eighty years of
time
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 period.
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