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The diagram below shows the development of the cutting tool in the Stone Age.

The diagram below shows the development of the cutting tool in the Stone Age.
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The given chart illustrates how the cutting
tool
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 in the
stone
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Stone
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 Age was developed 0.8 million years ago compared with 600,000 years earlier.
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, there are not many
difference
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differences
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 in the length and
with
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width
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 of the two tools apart from the difference in the thickness of the ones from the
sideview
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side view
. Looking at
tool
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 A, which is about 1.4 million years old, the appearance of it from the front view is triangular with a flat bottom. The length of it is about 10cm and its width is around 6cm. The thickness of
tool
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 A is a bit high and its edge is bent which shows that there was not much refinement was put
in
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 it Regarding
tool
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 B, there is no difference between the size of
tool
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 B compared with
tool
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 A except its surface is a bit smoother, and the edge of it from the side view is straight and thinner, which shows that more refinement was put on it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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