Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both there views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years,
beeing
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being
professional
is
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has
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really
struggle
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struggled
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for
people
. Because becoming
expert
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an expert
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human
require
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requires
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so much
decipline
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discipline
and time.
However
, some
people
argue that
professionals
should
work
in a
country
where they graduated
while
others think that
professionals
can
work
wherever they want. Both opinions have some benefits but from my point of view,
the
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professionals
should
work
in another
country
if they have
this
pleasure. First of all, working in a
country
where
complated
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completed
complete
their training as professional has some benefits. The most important advantage is that when experts,
such
as doctors,
work
in their own
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training
country
, they don't feel like
a
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apply
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stranger
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strangers
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. Because
,
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they already have gotten used to
live
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living
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together with
this
culture and
people
.
Moreover
,
professionals
learn a perspective about their jobs from their mentors. So, ıf they
work
same
country
, they don't hard about their occupations.
On the other hand
, they don't need to learn another language if they
work
same
country
.
As a result
, they can focus
their
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on their
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branches rather than learning
language
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the language
a language
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.
On the other hand
, working
another
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in another
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country
may cause a lot of good
apportunities
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opportunities
. If
people
who have a profession go to another
country
for working
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to work
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, they can gain so much experience and views.
This
situation
lead
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leads
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to
improve
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improving
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their career. After that, they can find better jobs and
apportunities
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opportunities
.
Furthermor
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Furthermore
, probably they earn
highest
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the highest
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income in other countries rather than
their
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in their
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own
country
's works. If we look different perspective, when
people
who have professional jobs learn
second
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a second
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langueage
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language
for working
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to work
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another
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in another
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country
, they can research
about
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apply
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their branches
easier
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more easily
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than before.
To sum up
, some
people
believe that
the
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professionals
should
work
wherever they
graduated
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graduate
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,
however
, it seems to me that it is more useful for professional
people
to
work
in different countries than in the same
country
.
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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to strengthen your argument. For instance, cite cases or scenarios where professionals have gained significant experience working abroad that benefited their careers.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using more linking words or phrases to smoothly transition between ideas or paragraphs.
general language
Revise your essay for language inaccuracies and spelling errors to ensure clarity. For example, the words 'beeing,' 'decipline,' and 'apportunities' should be corrected to 'being,' 'discipline,' and 'opportunities,' respectively.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
task achievement
You've addressed both perspectives in the discussion, showing a balanced understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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