The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The pie chart illustrates
destination
of Anthropology Correct article usage
the destination
graduates
from specific
university Correct article usage
a specific
while
the table depicts the incomes of the anthropologists in work
after five years.
Overall
, most of
Anthropology Change preposition
apply
graduates
become full-time worker
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workers
while
the least number of graduates
work
part-time alongside postgrad studying. On the other hand
, after 5 years'
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years
work
, anthropologists earn the highest salaries if they Change preposition
of work
work
in government
sector.
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the government
According to
the pie graph, when students graduate from one university of Anthropology branch , they become full-time worker
by 52 Fix the agreement mistake
workers
percent
. Working in Change the spelling
per cent
part-time
job is more common than Correct article usage
a part-time
unemployed
rate by 3%. Add an article
the unemployed
Moreover
, Full-time postgrad studying equal
with not known Add a missing verb
is equal
graduates
at 8 percent
. The least amount of percentage Change the spelling
per cent
come
from part-time Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
work
together with
postgrad study at 5%.
It is clear that
40% of freelance consultants can earn from 75,000 to over 100.000 dollar
Change to a plural noun
dollars
while
50 percentage of government sector's
employers earn 100 thousand Change noun form
sector
dollar
after 5 Change to a plural noun
dollars
years'
Change noun form
years
working
. 35% of private Change preposition
of working
companies'
workers have Correct your spelling
companies
income
between 50 thousand Correct article usage
an income
dollar
and 74,999 Change to a plural noun
dollars
dollar
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dollars
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