The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie chart illustrates
destination
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the destination
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of Anthropology
graduates
from
specific
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a specific
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university
while
the table depicts the incomes of the anthropologists in
work
after five years.
Overall
, most
of
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Anthropology
graduates
become full-time
worker
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workers
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while
the least number of
graduates
work
part-time alongside postgrad studying.
On the other hand
, after 5
years'
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work
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of work
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, anthropologists earn the highest salaries if they
work
in
government
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the government
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sector.
According to
the pie graph, when students graduate from one university of Anthropology branch , they become full-time
worker
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workers
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by 52
percent
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. Working in
part-time
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a part-time
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job is more common than
unemployed
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the unemployed
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rate by 3%.
Moreover
, Full-time postgrad studying
equal
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with not known
graduates
at 8
percent
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per cent
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. The least amount of percentage
come
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comes
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from part-time
work
together with
postgrad study at 5%.
It is clear that
40% of freelance consultants can earn from 75,000 to over 100.000
dollar
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dollars
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while
50 percentage of government
sector's
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sector
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employers earn 100 thousand
dollar
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dollars
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after 5
years'
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years
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working
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of working
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. 35% of private
companies'
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companies
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workers have
income
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an income
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between 50 thousand
dollar
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dollars
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and 74,999
dollar
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dollars
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work, dollar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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