The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparions where relevant.
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The line graph provided above depicts the proportions of homes in the US having five various modern facilities for a five-year period spanning from 1995. It can be seen that more and more households had bought all equipment, but the
phone
trend was the one with the most rapid growth, and
washing
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machine maintained its position as the most omnipresent tool. Regarding the less used technologies, in 1995,
DVD
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player stood at over 20%, with a remarkable fall, it reached a trough of almost 15 per cent, the lowest per cent of all
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before it experienced a considerable upward trend. The rate of households owning both the
internet
and
phone
rose from 10% and slightly under 20% respectively, to almost 20%, but they had different positive gradients afterwards, the proportion of
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internet
owners increased less rapidly than that of
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the phone
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phone
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phones
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. In 1998, houses
were
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equipped
by
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phone
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phones
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were one and a half times more than those with the
internet
.
Consequently
,
while
the trend of
phone
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phones
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soared abruptly and overtook
computer's
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the computer's
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line by the
last
year,
second
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widely
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used tool in homes, only two-fifths of houses
connected
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to the
internet
. Turning to movements of
computer
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computers
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and washing
machine
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machines
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, beginning at 40% and 60% respectively, they saw a considerable permanent rise over the period. washing machine kept its position as the most used tool at homes in the
last
year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, internet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adoption rates
  • technological proliferation
  • year-on-year growth
  • digital divide
  • saturation point
  • laggard technology
  • consumer electronics
  • technological obsolescence
  • internet penetration
  • market dynamics
  • socioeconomic factors
  • innovation trajectory
  • connectivity infrastructure
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