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Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?

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In
this
 highly competitive world, individuals have defined different standards of
success
 based on their perceptions. Some
people
 relate
success
 to their careers,
while
 others perceive it
according to
 their educational achievements.
This
 essay will discuss the different scales of
success
 and present my own view of being successful.
People
 strive to achieve their
goals
 in every race of
life
. Students work hard to get good grades,
while
 professional
people
 set their targets for career growth. They consider themselves successful after achieving the desired outcomes through their efforts.
For example
, scoring an A grade can be a huge
success
 for a student,
whereas
 getting a promotion is a great milestone to achieve for a professional. So, depending on the phase of
life
,
people
 have different meanings of
success
, which often comes after meeting certain
goals
. In my opinion, regardless of the phase of
life
,
success
 should be measured by the amount of happiness. Whether it is a small goal or a big achievement, if I am able to taste the fruit of my efforts, and it brings me joy, I will consider myself successful.
For example
, if I bring discipline into my
life
 after putting in effort for a few days, I would think of myself being successful because of the joy it brings. In conclusion,
people
 have different scales to measure
success
, which is often attached to the achievement of their career and educational
goals
.
Although
 many individuals perceive
success
 as achieving something big, I believe meeting small
goals
 can
also
 bring happiness, and it can ultimately lead to
success
.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that transitions between paragraphs are smooth, even though the structure is generally clear.
Task Achievement
Try to integrate more specific examples to enhance the depth of your discussion, even though your ideas are clear.
Introduction and Conclusion
The introduction effectively sets the context for the discussion, and the conclusion summarizes your views well.
Task Achievement
The essay clearly addresses the different perspectives of success and presents your personal view with clarity.
Supported Main Points
Each main point is introduced clearly and supported with relevant examples.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fulfillment
  • personal goals
  • happiness
  • career milestones
  • professional development
  • financial independence
  • security
  • philanthropy
  • contribution
  • personal development
  • recognition
  • work-life balance
  • self-improvement
  • well-being
  • subjective
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