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The bar graph shows the percentage growth in average properly prices in three diferent countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarize the infomration by selecting and reporting the key main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The bar graph shows the percentage growth in average properly prices in three diferent countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarize the infomration by selecting and reporting the key main features, and make comparison where relavant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the percentage growth in average
property
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 prices in three different countries namely Algeria, China, and Argentina from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 the
property
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price
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of
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in
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 China increased throughout the period, it decreased
for
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in
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 Algeria.
Moreover
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, the
price
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 of
property
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 in Argentina experienced fluctuation. In 2007, the
price
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 of
property
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 in China increased
around
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by around
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 2%, and
then
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 the
price
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 experienced a gradual increase throughout the period. In the
year
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 2009, the
property
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price
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 increased approximately 5.3%. In the
year
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 2010, it increased roughly 6.7 %.
In contrast
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, the
property
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price
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of
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in
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 Algeria increased
roughly
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by roughly
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 6.4% and in the next
year
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 2008, it declined
around
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by around
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 4.5%, and in 2010, it reached around 3.0%. Meanwhile, the
property
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price
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 of Argentina increased around 3.1 % in 2007,
while
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 experienced an increase
around
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of around
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 4.8%.
Then
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 after a sharp decline of 1.5% in the next
year
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, it experienced a slight increase again in 2010, which was roughly 2.3 %.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words property, price, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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