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The given pie chart shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country.

The given pie chart shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country.
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The given pie chart illustrates how
electricity
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 is produced in Ireland and the given table illustrates the principal reasons for using
electricity
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.
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, the majority of
electricity
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 is produced by coal and gas, and the primary reason for using
electricity
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 is heating.
According to
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 the pie chart, in Ireland, 45% of
electricity
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are
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is
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 produced by coal,
while
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 35 % of
electricity
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are
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 produced by gas. The rest of 20%
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electricity
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of electricity
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are
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 produced by 10% of solar power and 10% of wind power.
From
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According to
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 the table, in Ireland, 55% of
electricity
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are
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is
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 utilized to produce heat.
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, 20% of
electricity
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are
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 used for lighting. Kitchen
appliences
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appliances
consumes
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consume
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 15% of
electricity
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. Phone charging and consumer
electronic
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electronics
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 consume the same percentage of
electricity
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 which is 5 and these two consume the lowest amount of
electricity
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 among all.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity grid
  • Renewable energy
  • Environmental impact
  • Economy
  • Energy mix
  • Carbon emissions
  • Industrial consumption
  • Residential use
  • Government policy
  • Seasonal variations
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