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The given pie chart illustrates how electricity is produced in Ireland and the given table illustrates the principal reasons for using electricity.

The given pie chart illustrates how electricity is produced in Ireland and the given table illustrates the principal reasons for using electricity.
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The given pie chart illustrates how
electricity
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 is produced in Ireland and the given table illustrates the principal reasons for using
electricity
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 in the same country.
Overall
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, the majority of
electricity
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 is produced by coal and gas, and the primary reason for using
electricity
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 is heating.
According to
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 the pie chart, in Ireland, coal is used to produce the majority of
electricity
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 and 45% of
electricity
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 is produced by coal.
Similarly
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, 35 % of
electricity
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 is produced by gas. The rest of 20% of
electricity
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 is produced by 10% of solar power and 10% of wind power.
According to
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 the table, in Ireland, 55% of
electricity
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 is utilized to produce heat.
Moreover
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, 20% of
electricity
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 is used for lighting. Kitchen appliances consume 15% of
electricity
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. Phone charging and consumer electronics consume the same percentage of
electricity
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 which is 5, and these two consume the lowest amount of
electricity
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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