Wild animals have no use in the 21 century and trying to preserve animals now is just wastage of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with question
Some
people
are interested wild
Change preposition
in wild
animals
and they deal with wild animal
like Change the noun form
animals
tiger
or Fix the agreement mistake
tigers
spider
. But Fix the agreement mistake
spiders
this
just
Add a missing verb
is just
wastage
of money. Correct article usage
a wastage
For example
,someone have
a lion in her/his house. Change the verb form
has
People
must spent
a lot of money Change the verb form
spend
for
the lion. These are Change preposition
on
people
that they see a as hobby. They don't think any gain about
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in
this
.
In my opinion ,wild animal
should live in their natural life. They Fix the agreement mistake
animals
don't
Verb problem
aren't
suite
for Correct your spelling
suited
in house
, even Add a hyphen
in-house
they
provide a suitable shelter .Wild Correct word choice
if they
animals
are dangerous for people
and people
can't prevent instantly sitution
.Correct your spelling
situation
Therefore
,people
sould
Correct your spelling
should
is
not feed wild Unnecessary verb
apply
animals
.
Before people
live with wild animal
.They Fix the agreement mistake
animals
known
to act Add a missing verb
were known
of
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like
animal
and Fix the agreement mistake
animals
antique
Correct word choice
ancient
people
prevented theirself
and lived in the cave. They produced Correct your spelling
herself
their self
the
Correct article usage
apply
knifes
and Correct your spelling
knives
the
guns and used Correct article usage
apply
for
Correct pronoun usage
them for
the
wild Correct article usage
apply
animals
.Sometimes antique people
take advantage of wild animal
.Fix the agreement mistake
animals
People
ride on their and during war used
Wrong verb form
use
as
Correct pronoun usage
them as
gun
.
But now,Fix the agreement mistake
guns
this
situation is not suitable for in
the Change preposition
apply
21
century.
Correct your spelling
21st
These day
, especially rich Change the determiner
This day
These days
people
want to show theirself
Correct your spelling
themselves
Correct article usage
an increadible
increadible
Correct your spelling
incredible
incredibly
different
. They buy Replace the word
difference
lion
or tiger and keep or Correct article usage
a lion
built
in their garden a shelter.But feeding a big animal is very expensive because they can eat only Wrong verb form
build
meet
.Correct your spelling
meat
This
necessary
Add a missing verb
is necessary
a
big budget . Change preposition
for a
Therfore
,rich Correct your spelling
Therefore
people
use this
way as show
.
In summary , wild Correct article usage
a show
animals
have no use these days .They should live in wild life
.Correct your spelling
wildlife
Also
Add a comma
Also,
people
use in
order to show Correct pronoun usage
it in
of
the wild animal.Change preposition
apply
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coherence
Improve logical flow by better organizing paragraphs. For example, discuss the disadvantages of keeping wild animals first, followed by alternatives or benefits of preserving them.
structure
Ensure that your essay has clear paragraphs. Use each paragraph to express a single idea with supporting evidence.
task-achievement
Develop your main points with more detail. It is important to explore deeper reasons why preserving wild animals could be beneficial or problematic.
task-response
The essay has shown an understanding of the topic by mentioning the idea of cost and danger involved in keeping wild animals.
relevant-examples
Use of specific examples like having a lion in a house illustrates your point about costs and impracticality.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 2 - Example
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