‏o you agree or disagree because of more and more young people are studying and working overseas, this will bring greater international cooperation in the future?

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culture and nation.
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in using English
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for students who travel to America.
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in their economy.
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abroad are not limited only to belly
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people
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like climate change. So, enhance well living
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conditions
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and reduce health problems ‏In conclusion, international cooperation plays
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