Some people think that foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors during their visit to historic and cultural places. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some individuals

believed

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believe

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that foreign

visitors

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should pay more

money

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than local people during their visit to historic and cultural

places

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. I totally disagree with

this

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stament

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statement

because

foreing

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foreign

visitors

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might decide not

coming

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to come

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to see cultural

places

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anymore and historical

places

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might have to

closed

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due to

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not having enough

money

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to maintain them. One of the

reason

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reasons

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I did not support

this

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statements

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statement

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is that

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this

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the

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idea

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that

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foreign

visitors

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should pay more

money

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to visit cultural

places

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is totally wrong because

this

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lead to

bad

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a bad

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image for our country.

Also

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this

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lead

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leads

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feel

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feeling

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unwelcome to foreign

visitors

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to our country because they need to pay extra

money

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to enjoy historic

places

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. On top of

this

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, feeling that they are not treated

equal

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equally

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as the rest of the society might

ofend

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offend

find

them.

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, in most

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apply

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countries

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countries,

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tourists are welcome and public spaces offer them the best service and prices to make sure they will return the following year. Another reason why I do not support

this

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statement is that cultural

places

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, as well as historic buildings,

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as well as

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historic buildings might have to close because of not having

enought

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enough

money

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to maintain them in

well

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good

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condition

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conditions

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condition

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due to

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the fewer

visitors

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every year.

This

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might be because foreign tourists might decide not

coming

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to come

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back

due to

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the necessity of making

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extra payment. On top of

this

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this

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is an illogical way of treating

tourist

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tourists

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and they might decide to spread the

idea

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of not visiting any more our country. To

illustratre

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illustrate

my point, many developed countries have

suffer

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suffered

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from losing tourists

due to

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high

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the high

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cost of living

such

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renting

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as renting

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a hotel or buying food so they abandon the

idea

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comign

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coming

back, and

this

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lead

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led

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to many people

loosing

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losing

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their jobs. In conclusion, foreign

visitors

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should not be asked to pay more

for visiting

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to visit

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historic and cultural

places

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because they might

decided

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decide

be decided

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not

coming

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to come

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back to visit these

places

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and they might feel offended, so I strongly support the

idea

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of not asking them for extra

money

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and they should be treated the same way as the local people.

cuevas14dic

Dec 19, 2023

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Your essay lacks a clear logical structure, which makes it difficult to follow your arguments at times. Try using clear paragraphing and ensure each paragraph focuses on one main idea, providing clear topic sentences at the beginning of each. Moreover, use a variety of linking devices to create cohesion between your ideas within and across paragraphs.

task achievement

You have addressed the topic, but your response is not fully developed. Be sure to fully answer all parts of the prompt, providing a more detailed explanation of your position and discussing the implications of the issue. It is important to expand on your ideas with clear and detailed examples or reasons to support your arguments, which will help achieve a complete response and clearer, more comprehensive ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

351 words

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