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The table below describes percentages of homeschooled students in Some Country in 1999- 2004. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The table below describes percentages of homeschooled students in Some Country in 1999- 2004. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
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The static table below provides information about the percentages of homeschooled
students
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 in some countries between 1999-2004. It
also
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 shows the
grades
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 of
students
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 as well.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the given data, the highest proportion of homeschooled
students
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 was during
kindergarten
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the kindergarten
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 period and the lowest was detected between 1-2
grades
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.
Firstly
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, homeschooled kindergarten children' number in 1999 was 2.4% and it showed a slight increase every year and in 2004 it became 2.9%.
In addition
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 , in 1999 1.5% of
students
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 between 1-2
grades
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 were homeschooled and it showed a small decrease to 1.3% in 2001 but for 2004 2.1% of
students
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 were homeschooled in that country.
Secondly
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, 1.6% of young people between 5 to 6
grades
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 were studying at home in 1999,
however
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, in 2001 and 2002 the number showed a marginal decrease to 1.5% and in 2004 it had
significant
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a significant
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 leap to 2.6%.
Moreover
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, 1.6% of
students
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 were taking education at home in 1999 and by the end of 2004, the proportion of it became 2.5%. Taking everything into consideration, in the given country, in 1999 homeschooling was popular at the kindergarten level,
however
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, in 2004, it became popular almost
at
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apply
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every grade, which indicates that parents were not pleased
by
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with
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 the educational system of that country.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, grades with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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