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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008
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The chart compares the most reposted issues in terms of three categories in UK cities in 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most reposted problems were
health
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service
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 and
education
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 and training,
while
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 the opposite was true for
air
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pollution
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. As the chart shows, in Newcastle the most reposted issues were
health
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service
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 with more than 50% and the
last
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 one was
air
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pollution
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 with 5% and approximately 47% of
reports
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 were about
education
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 and training. The next
city
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 was Belfast and the most reposted issues were
health
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service
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 and the least reposted was
air
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pollution
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, 58% and 7%, respectively.
Education
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 and training had approximately 52%. The third
city
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 was Birmingham.
Reports
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 about
health
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 services were more than
reposts
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 for
education
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 and training, 55% and 52, respectively. The least reposted was for
air
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pollution
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 with around 8%.The following
city
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 was Cardiff. The most reported were
health
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 centres,
while
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 the lowest
reports
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 had
air
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pollution
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, 57% and 12%.
Education
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 and training had 51% of
reports
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. In Manchester,
reposts
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 for
education
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 and training were less than
reposts
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 about
health
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 centres, 51% and 44%, respectively.The least reposted was
air
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pollution
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 with 16%.
Reports
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 for
health
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 centres were less than
education
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 and training, 53% and 48%, and
air
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pollution
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 had 8% of
reports
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 in Glasgow.
Finally
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, the
last
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city
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 was London.
Reports
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 for
education
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 and training a bit more than
health
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service
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 53% and 52% and approximately 14% of
reposts
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 were for
air
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pollution
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 in 2008
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words health, service, education, air, pollution, reports, city, reposts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban areas
  • overcrowding
  • homelessness
  • traffic congestion
  • car ownership
  • public transportation systems
  • commuting times
  • air pollution
  • industrial activities
  • air quality
  • green spaces
  • urbanization
  • mental health
  • crime rates
  • socio-economic factors
  • sense of security
  • waste management
  • waste disposal
  • recycling
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