In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

The phenomenon of

a massive migrations

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a massive migration

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of

people

from rural

area

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areas

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to

cities

increase

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has increased

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throughout the years.

This

might

be

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happen because of the promising

prospect

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prospects

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in the

city

rather than the

countryside

.

However

,

this

may cause

the

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a

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decreasing

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decrease

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of

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in

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the population in the

countryside

.

Therefore

, I believe

this

is a sign of a negative development.

To begin

, it cannot be denied that the population in some major

cities

in the world

consider

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as

over-population

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overpopulation

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.

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might be

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the causes

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causes

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cause

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of the migration of

people

from the

countryside

to the

city

.

Although

,

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there are numerous solid reasons related to a better life opportunity in a

city

,

however

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it can affect the economy of the

city

. To

illustrates

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illustrate

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, one of expensive

city

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cities

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in Indonesia is Jakarta. Every year, a large

amount

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number

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of

people

moving

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move

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from small

cities

to Jakarta to

looking

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look

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for a better life.

However

, recent studies

shows

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that it

affect

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affects

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the living expenses and economy in Jakarta in a negative way. The prices insanely increase throughout the years from living

expanses

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expenses

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, healthcare,

accomodation

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accommodation

, etc.

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will affect the

live

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lives

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of the

people

since the supply for

job

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the job

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market

not

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does not

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equal the demand. The living quality will decrease

by

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for

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many unemployed

people

with lower income, whilst the living expenses

is

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will

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increase.

Moreover

, living in

a

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the

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countryside

is not a terrible idea. The living expenses in the

countryside

shows

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a steady number over the years and the variety of job opportunities in the

countyside

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countryside

could

be develop

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be developed

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between other residents. Based on the explanation, I firmly believe the phenomenon of rural

people

moving to

cities

is consider

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is considered

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of negative development act. The

governement

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government

could develop the rural area by

expand

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expanding

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the job opportunities rather than only focusing it

in

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on

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a

city

.