Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some

people

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believe that old

buildings

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and

houses

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should be replaced in cities with more modern

building

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while

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others argue that old

buildings

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should be protected. I would argue that we should destroy the old skyscrapers and

houses

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to build more modern

many-stationey

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many-stationy

buildings

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. On the one hand, it is important for us to keep the old

buildings

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remain for several reasons. The first reason is that the old building can be used in good ways.

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, some old

buildings

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in Ha Noi

was

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built for a long time,

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many official staff from government bodies still lived there. If we

destroyed

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that

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those

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buildings

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, it can impact directly

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their lives.

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, the old building can contain many historical

datas

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data

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, one building in Ha Noi had many things from many wars . It reminds us about difficult

period

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of time to fight to gain

independance

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independence

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, It seems to me that we should replace old skyscrapers and

houses

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in cities with more modern

buildings

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for many reasons.

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, modern

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can be constructed with modern design and features.

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, the

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built in Ha Noi are facilitated with many

mordern

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modern

equipments

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equipment

like automatic indoor light systems,

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automatic parking so that

people

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can feel more comfortable.

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, many skyscrapers

give

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good

facilites

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facilities

which make

people

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have a better

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life

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, the

buildings

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equip

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are equipped

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with supper markets, swimming pools,

cafe

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and cafe

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shops just a few

step

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steps

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from the apartment which

improve

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people

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's living standard In conclusion,

the

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apply

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old

building

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buildings

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and

houses

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can be meaningful in several ways, I believe that replacing them

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with

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modern

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the modern

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building

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buildings

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will be

better

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a better

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choice

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coherence cohesion

Enhance the logical structure by ensuring clear transitions between paragraphs and ideas. Ensure each paragraph covers a distinct point that supports your argument.

task achievement

Although ideas are presented clearly, try expanding on specific examples to substantiate your points more thoroughly.

general

A few grammatical errors exist, such as "old buildings in Ha Noi was" which should be "were" and "independance" should be "independence." Review your work for such minor errors to improve clarity.

task achievement

Both perspectives on the topic are addressed, demonstrating an understanding of the task requirement to discuss both views.

coherence cohesion

The essay presents a structured introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion and closing with a clear opinion.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?