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Band 7.5

Your friend has a travel company and would like you to come and work with him. Write a letter replying to your friends offer. In your letter: - explain what you know about your friends company choose whether you accept or decline the offer • give reasons for your choice

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Dear Noha, Hope
this
 letter finds you well. I’m writing to thank you for your generous request regarding me joining your company. I heard a lot of good news about your small travel business and it became famous for its successful new contract with Saudi
Airline
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last
 month, I know in fact that
this
 collaboration will send you places. I'm
also
 excited to attend your campaign on December 21st next month. Though I was happy to receive your letter I felt lucky to have
this
 opportunity, I’m sorry to tell you that I can’t join in. Now why am I declining
this
 lifetime offer? Well as you know I joined in health postgraduate program
while
also
 working a part-time job as a nurse at King Abdulaziz University Hospital. Adding another hustle will make my time even busier and I wouldn’t be able to keep up with my studies. I would love to hang out and hear more about your next campaign, what about meeting
this
 weekend? I’m looking forward to catchup Best regards, Wefag
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structure
Ensure each paragraph conveys a single idea for clarity. Consider separating information about your friend's company from your response decision for improved structure.
tone
Maintain formal tone by using full forms like 'cannot' instead of 'can't'.
task response
Effectively addresses all points of the task, including knowledge of the friend's company, decision acceptance/decline, and reason with invitation to meet.
organization
The letter is well-organized with a clear opening, body, and closing.
cohesion
Smooth transition between ideas and paragraphs, making the letter easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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