Many students today leave their home to study in another country. This is a growing trend. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying in another country.
The world is very different today and that includes education. Many
students
go to another country
to continue their studies. This
essay will outline the advantages and disadvantages of doing this
.
There are many advantages to studying outside their country
. Firstly
, study
outside the mother country
learn
new skills . Because can learn new language another your language Correct word choice
and learn
such
as English or chine language . Accept information about all over the world however
news about the far country
and can know a nice place of
visit there Change preposition
to
country
study
.secondly
, can make new friends other your country
to meeting and talk about yourself to learn new skills .They new friends is
very important because change air in the travelling to Verb problem
apply
study
. Finally
, studying outside your country
it
is very good because some Correct pronoun usage
apply
countries
have special schools . Such
as the UK have nice place schools that make people
student fans and some teachers have PhD and Change noun form
people's
master's
it is very good to learn important information to Capitalize word
Master's
be understand
man .
Nowadays , Ther are some disadvantages to studying outside your Change the verb form
understand
country
. Firstly
, Many people study
outside countries
it is far from your home and family .Although
students
have new problems about how can cooking
food and wishing your clothes . Some Wrong verb form
cook
students
feel miss their brother and only family . Secondly
, studying outside your home in a far country
some
UK is very expensive . Living in sim single room in a normal area it is needs many between staying free in your home . Correct determiner usage
the
For example
, the restaurant it is needs
mix many to fresh foods Change the verb form
is needed
such
as fish and beef . finally
, in Some countries
it is common to steal in an area . letter Add a comma
countries,
countries
in overall
world have strong police to protect Add an article
the overall
students
. people can kill and steal many students
because of unsafe country
.
In conclusion, it is clear to see that studying abroad has many advantages. However
, there are also
some disadvantages.Submitted by alfred on
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