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Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news while others think other media is better. Discuss both views anf give your opinion ?

#think #newspapers #method #news #media #anf
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it is highly argued what is the best way of reading the
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. some
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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others think social
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each point of
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view
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 I will express my personal opinion. most
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people
 consider the
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 better
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 than social
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newspaper
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 are available almost everywhere and in every store. there are different varieties of
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 for different types of
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, each person can obtain the
type
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 of
newspaprer
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newspaper
 he is interested in its
type
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 of
news
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. for
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, a person who has no
interst
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interest
 in
soprts
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sports
,
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 does not have to scroll over the
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news
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 to get to the
news
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 he is interested in
such
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 as
poletics
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politics
. in other meaning,
neewspaprer
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newspapers
newspaper
 are available
every where
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everywhere
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 and categorized.
although
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, most
people
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 disagree and still find
the
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 is a better option. many individuals consider the
media
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 as the best option to read the
news
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.
whereas
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, it
considerd
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considered
considers
 more handy than
newspaprer
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newspaper
. scrolling through the phone anytime and anywhere reading any
types
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type
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 of
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.
people
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 would value
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news
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, so it is faster than any other source of
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 available nowadays.
for example
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, when something important
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, the
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would spread
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 instantly.
moreover
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,
while
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 is available through
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phones,
thus
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 it would not be
neccesarly
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necessary
 to carry more
thing
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 around, where it
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 to be all available in one place which is the phone.
to conclude
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while
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 some
people
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 is
newspaper
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, others consider
media
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 is. on
one
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the one
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 hand, the first
type
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 think
newspapre
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newspaper
 is
cataegorized
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categorised
 which
make
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makes
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 it easier to read through
a specific types
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specific types
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 of
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other
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the other
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type
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thinks
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media
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 is faster in delivering the
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in
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addition
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more
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is more
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 handy.
while
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 both of the options have a reasoning point of view.
however
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the media
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 is better than
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the newspaper
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task achievement
Be sure to include specific and relevant examples to support your points. This adds weight and clarity to your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure by ensuring smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs for better flow.
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Work on expanding your main points with more detailed explanations and justifications.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your introduction provides a clear outline that previews the discussion points to engage the reader effectively.
task achievement
The essay covers both perspectives on the topic, which is a requirement of the task.
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The writer provides a personal opinion on the subject, which gives the essay a clear stance.
coherence cohesion
The essay exhibits awareness of structure by having an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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