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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the different levels of
air
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pollution
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 categorized into three factors,
electricity
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generation
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, transport and
industry
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, among four countries in 2021.
Overall
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, at first glance, China had the highest level of
air
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pollution
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, compared to other nations.
While
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 Australia stood in the first position, in terms of producing the lowest
air
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pollution
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,
electricity
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generation
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 caused the least amount of
air
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pollution
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. It is evident that in China
industry
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 sector created 80
ppm
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 of
pollution
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, the highest level of
air
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pollution
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.
Although
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electricity
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generation
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 and transport in China produced nearly 60
ppm
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 and 70
ppm
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, respectively, in America they were 30
ppm
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 and almost 60
ppm
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 in that period.
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, the amount of
air
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pollution
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 related to the
industry
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 sector in America was similar to that of the transport sector in Japan, at 30
ppm
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.
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, in Japan despite producing the highest amount of
air
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pollution
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 in
industry
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,
electricity
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generation
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 caused approximately 15
ppm
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.
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, in Australia, all sectors produced similar amounts of
air
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pollution
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, almost 20
ppm
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, electricity, generation, industry, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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