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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the average production of movies across five countries in
three
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 consecutive
years
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 (2007, 2008, and 2009).
Overall
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be observe
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 that
country
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 A had the highest released films in
three
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years
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,
this
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 was closely
follwed
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followed
 by
country
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 B.
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,
country
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 E remained relatively stable throughout the given period. In detail,
country
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 A produced movies at approximately 85 in 2007 and 2008;
however
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, in the following year it declined
about
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 79.
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country
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 B released 50 films in both 2007 and 2008 and showed a significant rise
of
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 production in 2009 at approximately 70. Looking more at the graph, countries C, D, and E had only produced less than 25 films in
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years
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.
Country
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 C exhibited a modest rise approximately 8 to 15 in 2009,
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country
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 D dropped to 10 in 2008.
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,
country
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 E
remain
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 stable at about 8 in
three
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 consecutive
years
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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