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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the average
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movies
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number of movies
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 produced across five nations, commencing from 2007 to 2009.
Overall
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, among the five nations,
country
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 A produced more
movies
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, followed by
country
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 B,
whereas
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, the three countries made fewer
films
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 throughout the period.
Country
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 A released approximately 85
films
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 in 2007 and 2008
and
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which
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 decreased to 77
movies
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 in 2009. Meanwhile, in 2007 and 2008
the
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movie production in
country
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 B remained stable at exactly 50
,
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 and surged to about 75 in 2009. Countries C, D, and E, produced less than 25
films
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 throughout the given time,
country
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 C's production of
films
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 saw a moderate
increased
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increase
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 from approximately 10
films
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 in 2007 to 20 in 2009.
In contrast
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, nation D's production declined in 2008
at
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to
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 about 10
while
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country
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 E's
films
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 produced remained unchanged for three years at 10
movies
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, country, films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Film production
  • Trends
  • Consistently
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Patterns
  • Increased/Decreased
  • Analyzed
  • Anomalies
  • Industry changes
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural aspects
  • Collectively
  • Overall trend
  • Reported
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