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The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbinton, and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbinton, and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the present structure of
Norbitan
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the Norbitan
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 industrial area and its future development plan. At
glance
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a glance
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, it could be noticed that the town will become less Industrial and more residential with few facilities
such
 as shopping, education, and medical care. The development will occur
while
 having only a small patch of farmland untouched.
In
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 present, the central roundabout is surrounded by factories and
road
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 from Centre to East. In future, the roundabout will remain,
the
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and the
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 factory around it will convert into shops to
southwest
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the southwest
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, housing to
Northwest
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the Northwest
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, and a Medical Centre to the southeast. The original road to the east will have housing on either
sides
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along with
 a large playground to
north
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the north
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 and a school at the border to
East
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the East
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. There will be a bridge over the river and farmland to
North
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the North
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 will remain only to
east
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the east
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 and
rest
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the rest
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 will
convert
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 to housing. A small roundabout will be constructed to
south
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the south
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 and will be connected to the original roundabout.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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