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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information on
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output
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the output
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 of various kinds of non-renewable
energy
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production
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 in a span of twenty years.
Overall
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,
energy
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 source
production
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 differs
according to
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 its type.
According to
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 the diagram, petroleum contributed to the largest fuel
production
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, starting just above 80 in 1981 before
surged
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 significantly to almost 140 in 1984. Afterwards, petroleum
output
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 remained constant at 140 except from 1990 to 1992 there was
decline
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a decline
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 to 100.
Next
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The next
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energy
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 source, which is coal, showed a sharp declining trend from 80 in 1981
dropped
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to just below 40 in 1984. Though there was
increment
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 to around 60 from 1986 to 1991, coal
production
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 dropped
further
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thereafter
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 and remained constant at just below 40 till 2000.
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Lastly
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 natural gas
output
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 remained constant for 10 years duration at around 40 until 1991
where
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 there was
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase
of
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output
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 to approximately 100 in 2000. In conclusion, non-renewable
energy
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production
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 for petroleum and natural gas remained high for
past
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the past
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 twenty years except for coal
that
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which
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 considerably decreased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words output, energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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