The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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the map shows
Garlsdon
town
,
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and two possible locations for a supermarket to
be build
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in.
overall
, the
supermarkets
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supermarket's
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location is
ment
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meant
to
be build
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either in the middle of the
town
or in its countryside.
moreover
, the map shows that there are three cities near
Garlsdon
with
smaller
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a smaller
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population
, railway and main
roads
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locations.
Garlsdon
town
having a
population
of 65000 is located in the south-east of Hindon
town
by 12 Km which has 10000 people living in it.
also
in the south-west of
Garlsdon
there is Bransdon
town
distance with 16Km with a
population
of 15000.
whereas
,
25Km
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25 km
south-east
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southeast
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of
Garlsdon
there is Cransdon with 29000
population
. the first location is planned to be in the focal area of
Garlsdon
town
, just at the southern area of the railway, surrounded by
indusrtial
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industrial
and housing
area
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.
while
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the other site is to be north-west of
town
in the countryside. approximately, between Hindon and Bransdon.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words garlsdon, town, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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