In some areas of the US, a “curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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are perpetrated by criminal organizations, with the goal of keeping our

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safe.

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an excellent dialogue between parents and children.

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In some areas of the US, a “curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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