In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fee. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone.What extend do you agree or disagree.

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Some people believe that one
qualifications
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to
enroll
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in an institution is that one person
is oblige
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ro
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to
settle a costly school fee.But others
also
thought that not everyone
can
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pay for their school obligations.
Therefore
,several individuals anticipate that
education
in school should be freely given to all.I disagree with
this
opinion because
since
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the quality of higher
education
depends on the amount of money and it should not be free. On the one hand,
education
is a right for
students
regardless of their
socio economic
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socioeconomic
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status.
However
, other
students
pay a huge amount of money because
university
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a university
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eduation
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education
requires a lot of cash in numerous departments.
For example
,the wages of teachers and
staffs
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staff
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, the
equipments
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equipment
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or machines needed for the laboratories,maintenance services of the campus and other
infrastructures
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facilities available
in
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campus. In order to compensate
these
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huge expenses they demand a large sum of money from their enrolees which is not surprising and
innappropriate
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inappropriate
.
On the other hand
, not all
students
came
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from rich
family
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families
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and it is sometimes impossible to pay tuition fees by working
part time
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.To elaborate ,if any student
is disable
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or has
low
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a low
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physical capacity for work we can not deny his right to
education
.To
assure
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this
right,impoverished
students
can
be benefited
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from
scholarhsips
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scholarships
provided by schools which can help them achieve their goals.If
this
alternative be implemented equality would be established by
this
. Those who are able to pay the fees could contribute to
unversity
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university
expenses.
To conclude
,
high quality
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education
is established to build a nation and university. Governments would
also
decide how
thath
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those
goals can be achieved.Bearing the expenses and assuring higher
education
for all schools be the priority.
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