With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?
There are some concerns regarding threats to
children
through the Use synonyms
internet
. The dangers vary from Use synonyms
unappropriate
Correct your spelling
inappropriate
contents
to sexual assaults. Fix the agreement mistake
content
Therefore
, governments' policies are made to limit Linking Words
children
's access to the Use synonyms
internet
. Use synonyms
However
, regardless of those policies, many people say that parents must control their Linking Words
children
's exposure to the Use synonyms
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internet
. I agree with Capitalize word
Internet
this
approach because of two main reasons.
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Firstly
, the Linking Words
internet
is a free domain. Everyone can access anything Use synonyms
in
the Change preposition
on
internet
. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
children
are vulnerable. They do not know what is good or bad, or even dangerous for them. Use synonyms
Hence
, adults must guide them by communicating and controlling their Linking Words
children
's access to the Use synonyms
internet
. I read a news couple of weeks ago about a teenage girl who has a Use synonyms
long distance
boyfriend Add a hyphen
long-distance
in
the Change preposition
on
internet
. She has never met the boy, but she is willing to do some porn show for him through her phone. Use synonyms
That is
awful.
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Secondly
, the Linking Words
internet
has a lot of attractive platforms Use synonyms
which
most of them are not productive. Correct word choice
and
Therefore
, it is very Linking Words
significant
for parents to limit their Correct word choice
important
children
's time Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
on
internet
use. Those boys and girls need to do something else for the sake of their future, Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
excercising
and socializing. Correct your spelling
exercising
For example
, my neighbour's oldest boy becomes asocial because he is spending Linking Words
to
much time gaming Replace the word
too
in
the Change preposition
on
internet
.
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To conclude
, Linking Words
eventhough
the Correct your spelling
even though
internet
has many advantages, there are some risks Use synonyms
especially
regarding Add the comma(s)
, especially
children
Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
varies
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various
of
threats and Change preposition
apply
time consuming
. Add a hyphen
time-consuming
Therefore
, I think it is better for adults to control their Linking Words
Use synonyms
children
usage of the Change noun form
children's
internet
. In the future, I think there have to be some policies from Use synonyms
government
to give social media platforms penalties if they make features exploiting Correct article usage
the government
children
.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples to strengthen your arguments, particularly regarding how parents can effectively control internet usage for children.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow between paragraphs by using more linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Strong introduction and conclusion that clearly present the topic and your stance.
task achievement
The essay addresses the question effectively and clearly supports the position on why adults should control children's internet access.