Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, we hear many news and information about environmental changes. Some people believe the most important environmental problem is the
loss
of special
species
of
plants
and
animals
while
others are not on the same page and they think there are more important matters. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and present my own notion. On the one hand, believing the main
environment
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issue comes from
loss
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the loss
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of
species
can
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reasonable in some
people
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views. Lossing different kinds of
animals
and
plants
can impact
on
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other animal's life.
For example
, if an animal
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to find her/his
foods
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,
beacuse
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because
they are no more
exist
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, the life cycle of
this
animal will change and
this
can
results
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in more
number of
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species
loss
.
Moreover
, as we know all
animals
have their own predators, so
loss
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the loss
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of the predators can cause changes in
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balance .
For example
, consider snakes as predators of
mouses
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, if we
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snakes there will be
huge
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a huge
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number of
mouses
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on the earth which can hurt nature and humans.
On the other hand
, there are other issues which
consider
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more important in other views . One of these problems is the high amount of CO2 emissions which cause global warming and air
pollutions
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pollution
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,
this
can
also
lead to loose of some
species
.
For instance
, air
pollutions
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pollution
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can impact
on
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many
animals
and
plants
.
In addition
, it has huge effects on
human's
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health.
Furthermore
,
other
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environmental problem is the huge number of constructions and city developments which
results
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in deforesting and cutting so many trees
also
destroying many
species
habitat. To summarize,
lossing
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losing
species
of
plants
and
animals
can cause some negative effects on nature.
However
, I personally think there are more significant environmental issues which mostly
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from
human's
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actions.
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Both perspectives of the environmental issue have been considered, demonstrating a balanced understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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