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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The provided pie chart below illustrates the priority reasons why agricultural grounds turn out to be less productive. The following table
represents
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shows
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 how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
Overall
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, Europe resulted in the most
land
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degradation
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,
while
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Oceania
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the Oceania
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 region showed
the
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a
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 moderate percentage
in
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of
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the
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land
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degradation
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 compared to other regions. The least
land
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degradation
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 was caused by North America respectively. North America indicates over 5 per
cent
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 in total
land
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degradation
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, in which 0.2 per
cent
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 of
land
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 was degraded by deforestation,
and
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3.3 per
cent
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 of
land
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degradation
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 was caused by over-cultivation
as well
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as
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and
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 1.5 per
cent
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 of
land
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degradation
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 was followed by over-grazing. Europe, leading the high position in
the
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apply
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land
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degradation
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, showed
total
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a total
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23
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of 23
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 per
cent
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, in which 9.8 per
cent
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 of that type of
land
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 was caused by deforestation, and 7.7 per
cent
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 of
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land
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the land
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 was degraded by over-cultivation
as well as
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 5.5 per
cent
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 of
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land
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the land
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 was degraded in over-grazing respectively. As for Oceania, it accounted for
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overall
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an overall
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 13 per
cent
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 of
land
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degradation
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, in which 1.7 per
cent
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 was caused by deforestation, and 11.3 per
cent
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 was caused by over-grazing,
whereas
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 the over-cultivation was not a cause for
land
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degradation
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 completely in
this
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 region.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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